Hi xDragonia,

könntest du vielleicht nochmal alle deine Sprites zusammen in einem Post präsentieren? Es ist ziemlich mühsam sich durch 15 Seiten Posts zu lesen und wenn ich den nächsten gefunden hab, weiß ich schon nimmer wie der andere aussah

Ich finde sie aber alle gerenell sehr gut gelungen und die können locker einige der bisher rausgekommenen Drachen bei DC in die Tasche stecken. Du hast wirklich großes Talent und ich drück dir ganz feste die Daumen, dass es einer oder mehrere deiner Drachen zur release bei DC schaffen

da hab ich gar nicht mehr runtergescrollt
Danke

Zitat von xDragonia

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Meine Ideen:

Cupid Arrow Amphitere:


"This cute egg has red designs on it which are looking like hearts."


"Aww... It's a cute baby dragon. It is very lovely and never attacks others."


"Aww... It's a cute baby dragon. It is very lovely and never attacks others. And look! It's grown horns and it's wings have grown larger! It must be close to maturing."


"Cupid Arrow Amphiteres are sweet-tempered dragons, always helpful, and probably the best peacemakers of the world. Some people believe that they were born to reconcile the dragons. When they see fighting dragons which could get seriously hurt, they must intervene! Of course they can distinguish from combat training and serious cases. Even with larger dragons as themselves, they stand in even if it could cost their lives. However they are strongly built and muscular, which is why they are only extremely rarely violated. They usually do not hurt others. To defend themselves anyway, they have the ability to send others into a deep, sweet dream with their breath to avoid a fight. Their favorite food are strawberries which is why they prefer especially forests, but they can occur in the most diverse areas and are known everywhere as a good Dragon, named after their heart-shaped cornea on their head and the three horns that look like an arrow from Cupid which is stretched in an arc, as well as their behaviour."

(Horrible Candy Dragon (Ich weiß, das Wort "Horrible" existiert nicht, aber das ist nur das Original was ich mich verlesen hatte und es könnte ja eine Mischung aus Horror und Terrible sein xD)
"This egg is dark with colored stripes."
"Aww... It's a cute baby dragon. It seems to be a little crazy and aggressive."
"Aww... It's a cute baby dragon. It seems to be a little crazy and aggressive. And look! It has grown wings! It must be close to maturing. (WIRD EVENTUELL VERWORFEN)

Voodoo Dragon:


"This egg is made of... cloth?"

Spriter's Alt:
"Aww... It's a cute baby dragon. It is really made of cloth but it seems to be a special material."

Spriter's Alt:
"Aww... It's a cute baby dragon. It is really made of cloth but it seems to be a special material. And look! It has grown wings! It must be close to maturing."

Spriter's Alt:
"Voodoo Dragons are a very mysterious breed. A legend tells that a dragon was alone and made a puppet of itself. the puppet and the dragon had the same abilities and one day when the dragon died, the puppet died too. The children of the puppet were like the children of the dragon, when the puppets were hurt the dragons were hurt too and so they were named Voodoo dragons. However, Voodoo dragons are like the dragons they are connected with, haves got the same gender and the same abilities but don't need to eat or drink. If they cry, they cry blood. It's eyes are just buttons and the material they are made of is very light, so they can fly with they small wings if the dragon they connected with can fly. Voodoo dragons are very popular at Hatchlings but that can mean danger if they are aggressive."

Lavadiver Serpent


"This egg is heavy sooting in."


"Aww... It's a cute baby dragon. It swims in lava and loves the heat."


"Aww... It's a cute baby dragon. It swims in lava and loves the heat. And look! It has grown horns and its fins has grown larger! It must be close to maturing."

M F
"Lavadiver serpents live in lava and can even swim in it. With their reflective scales they are also camouflaged there. They leave the lava in which they live only to snatch for prey, but only as long as they remain in a warm place, as they are very sensitive to cold - but emmun against heat. Their sooty horns serve to deter and combat enemies, and with her beautiful, powerful fins they are attracting mates. Except with their horns, they also struggle with their body heat against enemies, they entwine them with their heat and can also strangle them. Females with offspring can be particularly dangerous because they aren't getting very often offspring. Their offspring hatch in flames what can recognize also on the soot on them."

Painter Pygmy


"This egg is full of colors."


"Aww... It's a cute baby dragon. It seems to love the colors of the nature."


Aww... It's a cute baby dragon. It seems to love the colors of the nature. And look! It has a brown skin now and paints with its tail! It must be close to maturing.

M F
Painter pygmys are loving colors and so they take the colors of the nature and transform their home into a colorful place with their tail. They are very friendly and mostly live in larger groups. While they haven't got wings they can jump really high and far. If they are in danger, they can run really fast and hide behind stones or something else. Male painter pygmys make themself colorful to atract mates. They are vegeterians and loves grapes and carrots. Sometimes they paint on sleeping dragons.

Chirping Dragon


"This egg vibriating if you go near."


"Aww... It's a cute baby dragon. It is jumping from tree to tree."

M F
"Aww... It's a cute baby dragon. It is jumping from tree to tree. And look! It has grown wings! It must be close to maturing."

M F
Chirping Dragons are very common dragons in the jungle. With their transparent wings they aren't able to fly but they can vibrate them to produce a special chirping sound. This sound is used for warning if someone is going to near to their home and also to attract mates. With their dark eyes they can see not very good but can sense everything around them with their wings. If their wings are broken they have to wait not a long time because they have a very fast regeneration ability. They prefer to live on high trees and if there is danger they can jump from tree to tree with their long legs. They can get very aggressive and often attacking others if they enter their area.

Ring Dragon

Licht: Dunkel:
"This egg is glistening very colourful."

Licht: Dunkel:
"Aww... It's a cute baby dragon. It's scales are glistening wonderful."

Licht: Dunkel:
"Aww... It's a cute baby dragon. It's scales are glistening wonderful. And look! It created rings with it's magic! It must be close to maturing."

M Licht: Dunkel: F Licht: Dunkel:
"Ring dragons are a very social and wise breed of dragons and are named after their golden rings which they can create with their magic. Their scales are glistening very colorful in the light. With their rings they fight against enimies, make music for attracting mates, do tricks for amouse the young dragons and so on. The larger mane of the females is very warm and a nice place for hatchlings. If the egg of a ring dragon wasn't in the light, their scales are dark too while the others are brighter. The hatched dragon can be dark or bright, not depending on the colour of the parents."

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Zu den oberen 3 komm ich später noch hab heute nur keine Zeit mehr mich ausführlich damit zu befassen.

Painter Pygmy:
ne ganz tolle Idee für Ostern! Gefällt mir
Beine (Schenkel) vielleicht noch etwas breiter/kräftiger. (->Känguru-mäßig )
Und ich würde ihm doch noch irgendwie kleine Flügelchen verpassen. Sonst sieht das einem Säugetier zu ähnlich. Wir wollen bei Dragoncave ja Drachen haben
Beschreibungsverbesserung:
"...into a colorful place with their tail" würde ich in "into a colorful place using their paintbrush-looking (oder -like) tail" ändern
"Male painter pygmys make themself colorful to attract mates" würde ich in "In breeding season the males make themselfs as colourful as possible or with special patterns to attract females (oder: get the female's attention)" andern

Chirping Dragon:
- sehr schöne Idee und Umsetzung. Bei den Vorschlägen bei DC gibts ja schon einige mit so einer ähnlichen Flügelform, aber deine gefällt mir am besten und die Beschreibung passt im Großen und Ganzen dazu. Könnte mir den eher als Pygmy vorstellen, aber da wär er dann wahrscheinlich zu undeutlich. Wirklich hübsch ausgearbeitet. Am Sprite gibts nix zu verbessern.
Lediglich im Beschreibungstext ein paar Fehlerchen gefunden: "This sound is used for warning if someone is going to near to their home..." würde ich "This sound is used for warning if someone comes too close to their home-tree" (haben die überhaupt sowas was man Zuhause nennen kann oder hängen die jeden Tag an anderen Bäumen rum?
"With their dark eyes they can see not very good" würde ich austauschen durch "With their dark eyes they cannot see very good
"If their wings are broken they have to wait not a long time because they have a very fast regeneration ability" würde ich schreiben "If their wings are broken they (can) regenerate it very fast"
"often attacking others if they enter their area"
1. statt "area" würd ich "territory" schreiben
2.Bin mir nicht ganz sicher aber ich glaube das -ing bei attacking muss weg. Die -ing Form bezeichnet Tätigkeiten, die man gerade im Moment macht oder fortlaufende Tätigkeiten. Bei sich gewöhnlich wiederholenden Tätigkeiten wo der Zeitpunkt nicht genau bekannt ist wird keine -ing Form verwendet http://www.vocabulix.com/grammatik/simpl...-englisch.shtml (<-- steht bei Anwendung 2) + 3))
-Das was mir aber noch komisch vorkommt in der Beschreibung ist, dass sie auf sehr hohen Bäumen leben. Wie kommen sie denn da hoch? Sie können nicht fliegen und beim klettern sind die langen Sprungbeine auch eher hinderlich. (Heuschrecken leben auch nicht auf hohen Bäumen. Alles was gut springt/hüpft lebt in Bodennähe wo sie auch Platz haben für Sprünge). Baumkronenspringen ist durch Größe und Gewicht (kein Pygmy) von Ast zu Ast kaum möglich. Vielleicht eher noch in Bodennähe am Stamm klammernd und dann von Stamm zu Stamm springend.

Ring Dragon:
-gefällt mir insgesamt sehr gut. Form, Farbe, Tag/Nacht Variante und Beschreibung toll und stimmig.
-Ei der Licht-Form heller blau machen
-Verbesserungswunsch: Hinterbeine deutlicher machen: beim W letztes Beinglied (Pfote) stärker abwinkeln. Sonst siehts aus als fehlt ein Beinglied. Beim M ist das Hinterbein nicht klar als solches zu erkennen. Zu viel großes "gestrubbel" was dran rauswächst. Vielleicht noch irgendwie die Kopfstellung verändern. So hab ich zuerst gedacht der Teil des geringelten Schwanzes wär ein verdrehtes Hinterbein und das steckt in seinem Maul xD